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 Fiction-The Boy at Archie's

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Posted on 03-21-07 9:16 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Shreya watched intently as the new people moved in next door.She was partially hidden by the potted plants which had grown too big over the summer .Her Mom had not been around lately to prune the greenery she loved so much. The new family seemed to be in mourning; garbed in white.And like with most children ,for Shreya,the adult figures faded away to obscurity and thus found herself concentrating on the boy who looked to be about her size and age. Even with his head shaved he was still a beautiful boy, very much like his mother. Shreya at age eight fell in love with him . And as if he suddenly had an inkling of all that was going on in her head ,the boy looked up and gave a little wave. Shreya gasped involuntarily. She could not figure out how he could see her ,hidden amongst the plants.
Then she heard a voice wafting through, “ Hey! Can we come over to see your house?”

It was her Didi, Shovana. Shovana was a completely different entity from Shreya though they were only 2 years apart.Shovana it seemed ,was forever bursting with excitement.It was in the way she woke up.She never awoke gently. Pop! Her eyes would open,and up she would jump and she would do a little jig as she went to the bathroom. Singing off-key and growing louder as she shampooed. On the brink of some great discovery to the meaning of fun.That was her elder sister.
.Shreya who shared a room with her didi was a confounded witness to it all.
So there was Shreya,watching in the shadows while Shovana trundled downstairs unheeding of Thuli who was polishing the floor.

“Hi,I am Shovana. I live next door.We are so so so happy to have you all here.I knew there were going to be children .There are no children of our age in this neighbourhood.unless ofcourse you count the kids from the big house across the road.But they are home only during the holidays so it’s not really the same.Where is the girl I saw just now? She looks tall but then she could be my age since my Mom tells me I am pretty short for my age.Ofcourse, my mom is prone to exaggerations!She used to to be actress you see..” she finished off in a hurry .

All this was received with a mild amusement from the couple of grown-ups who were unloading boxes ,suitcases, strange bundles and some worn out furnitures.Shovana always had that effect on people,with all her enthusiasm and her dimples.

“ Where do you go to school?” the boy asked.
“ You are probably hoping we will be going to school together but nopes.We go to an all girls’ school. My mom does not like the idea.Although,I fail to see why. Boys are so much more fun to play with. Some of them are even better runners and cyclists than I am. Ofcourse,it is a great place for my Baini. She is a girly girl. You ought to see her doll collection.Phewww..that girl can sure play with her dollies.All day sometimes!” she added,eyes widening.

He was just as excited about the move,happy to leave their old house with their unhappy memories behind.Over the past few months,much had changed. For one,his Papa had died.And though when asked if he missed his father ,he would nod silently and retreat into his room.He did not. He knew he was supposed to and intermittently woke up at night ,screaming in terror ,for he would find that his Papa had come by his bedside,reproachful and simmering with anger.He would wake up,heart pounding,breathless. His elder sister understood and held his hand ,caressing his brow until he went back to sleep. They both never spoke of it to their Mamu.

“My name is Aashish.And my sister who is helping inside is ,Kriti. She is a lot like your Baini I would say. ” he offered a smile at that.

“ Do you cycle? I could teach you and my Baini at the same time you know?”Shovana’s feet were already starting to itch. Her new red bike gleaming in the sun was her latest pride and she rode it like a devil .But try as she might,she could not get her little sister to try it out. Shreya was in Shovana’s book very very dull.always poring over her picture books,sketching,painting,playing with her dollies or begging Thuli to make a new Fariya set for her Barbies.Imagine..Barbies in Fariyas! Just thinking about it all,made her head muddled up.

“Do you like yoghurt? I love mine cold with a dash of sugar.I think I could have you and Kriti over at my house.Don’t mind if Thuli makes eyes at you though hai? She does it to all ke.” Shovana explained.

Aashish after getting permission from his mom ,tried to get his didi to go too but was turned down as he expected. Aashish,half a head shorter than Shovana,walked towards her house at first, and then suddenly she shouted ,“ Let’s see who touches that old evergreen tree at the end of the driveway!”

With that they both sprinted.It was a very close tie.Shovana grinned her huge big grin ,dimple and all and said approvingly, “You can run hai?”

As they entered the house through the backdoor,they heard Thuli complaining shrilly, “ You brought in all the dirt again?You been running without any slipper on ho ? Uff..this girl will be the death of me,Prabhu!”

“ Sorry Thuli dd,won’t do it again,didi!” Shovana hollered back. As she said that ,she got two china bowls and then adding a third one,she whispered conspiratorially ,“ Thuli will go blue in the face if she knows I am using these.But I think you should ,since this is your first time in our house.The next time…you get the steel bowl same as all my other friends!”

“Shreyaaaaaa….come downnnn!” Shovana called for her sister. A while later,Shreya appeared.Unlike her her sister,she spoke only when necessary and was dressed neatly.Her hair in two neat plaits ,tied at the end with yellow ribbons matching the colour of her her cotton dress.

That day, their friendship was forged.It was perhaps the best summer of their lives.Unclouded by grown up worries. The whole of that day,while Kriti and her mom got settled in at their new place ,Aashish learnt how to cycle. Shreya at his gentle coaxing stepped out too. Shovana lost interest after a while and took to climbing her favourite tree with her plastic telescope.In her own little world,pretending to be a lone pirate ,marooned on an island. Aashish encouraged and praised and willed Shreya to cycle.Shreya too,used to only her sister as a playmate found that she could do far better than she had thought possible. After a while they were laughing and often falling on the soft grass which cushioned their fall.
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[This much for now.they will probably have turned into teens or sthg in the coming chapter.And nah,tis not a love triangle thingy with the 2 sisters fighting over one boy!]
 
Posted on 03-21-07 10:01 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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:)
Next please!!..:P
 
Posted on 03-21-07 11:32 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Audrey. H---Everytime I stumble upon one of your creative writing pieces I see my childhood coming to life. The anticipation of what's going to happen next is getting my senses excited..so, what are you waiting for?? Juggy, me and I am sure rest of the 77 visitors are anticipating ur quick return.....Come back soon!! :-)
 
Posted on 03-21-07 11:41 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Good story. Keep it coming.
 
Posted on 03-21-07 11:44 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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audrey, i knew not you were a writer!
lovin the piece!
 
Posted on 03-21-07 11:58 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Posted on 03-21-07 3:05 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Compelled to dive into the blurry yesteryears of childhood.

A marvel, Audrey.H. Keep 'em coming.
 
Posted on 03-21-07 5:23 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Audrey, Very nice..simple and short, but interesting..is it to be continued??
 
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Posted on 03-21-07 6:34 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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*blush*.. will work on the characters a bit after I am done wth my weekend project.Thanx ya all.
 
Posted on 03-22-07 1:57 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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very enjoyable!!(pardon the lack of vocab hehe)and that too comin from a half awake groggy person dunno wat might have been typed if fully awakened?;oP hehe...

and nice to know it wont be a triangle thingy!..and i know most prob i be given evul stares for sayn this..but im actually hopin it aint gonna be a love story ;oP hehe..but i guess that is hopin for too much?there were some strong hints about attachments and feelns?:oS hehe

anyways lookn foward to more..will look back here after weekend hehe..

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azn i knew not u were a reader!!dhokeybasni!(jpt hai just felt the need to put some exclamation marks so "using" u ;oP hehe)u went to the other side!:o| hehe..

anyways good day!:oD
 
Posted on 03-22-07 6:59 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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keep it coming....waiting impatiently
 
Posted on 03-22-07 10:03 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Posted on 03-23-07 2:38 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Dannyboy..what life would there be without love huh? Life is all about loving and living:P
am working on the plot aniways.
 
Posted on 03-23-07 5:27 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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hehe aud..well that be quite a life eh?but still a life nonetheless? ;oP hehe..well u know this love thingy..caring about another person like with not many others(is that love?hehe)seems like a nice thing to feel..but thats not the only thing in life to feel/experience is there?haha sounds like some consoling words a person who doesnt know or experienced it might say?tell me about it!;oP hehe

and just cos i said that (about the comment that "hope it aint too much about a love story" ;oP hehe..i mean i guess at that time watever i was feeln...was in the mood where u know u find it a cliche seeing/hearin that word but feeln diff now ;oP hehe..)dun take it too seriously..couldnt stop imaginin how great a feeln it be to have daughters like Shreya and Shovana while reading about them..oh u know have heard too much of "old enuf to be a father of two" from frens and other concerned ppl ;oP hehe..how many of us get that kinda 'concerned' words?im sure im not the only one..am i?:o| ;oP hehe..so lovin the whole story so far(in case i might have given the wrong idea?;oP hehe)and even if its a love story..im sure it be really engaging and enjoyable story..well not all love stories are the same is it?;oP hehe..oh no expectancy btw in case u felt some there ;oP hehe..

anyways i better stop wafflin eh?plus i smell something burning!naheeen!:o| hehe..but yeah lreally lookin foward to wat kinda plot u work out..

oh just a question popped into my head(might as well type it eh?of cos there aint any absolute answer for it..but wats wrong with just askn/cryn out for an answer hoina?;oP hehe)they do say its better to be loved than to love(well thats wat i hear most of the time hehe)..but is it really better?i mean..to each their own..but doesnt it sound more logical (if ppl have my sense of logicality ;oP hehe)one will appreciate (or learn to appreciate) being loved when they loved before?or will one learn to love more esp after being showered with love a lot?haha jpt ke ke type garyo!:o| ..each will have their own answer hoina?wats urs?;oP hehe..

anyways good day!!:oD
 
Posted on 03-23-07 8:32 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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what's your answer to that danny:-D
 
Posted on 03-25-07 9:10 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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was that guy jughead:P...
nice names: SHreya, Shovana ..:D
sorry read only names.i will read later okieee
 
Posted on 03-28-07 9:11 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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My all time favourite names too,Imu :)
 
Posted on 03-28-07 9:15 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Dhatteri Jhukkayo!! :(
I thought story is here!! :( :(
:@ :(
 
Posted on 03-28-07 9:42 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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lol! jpt...am working on it.My weekend project sorta spilled into my week too :(
 



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